Question

假定你是中學生李華。在一位名叫TigerMom的學生家長的博客上，你看到如下內容。請你根據博客內容、寫作要點和要求，給這位家長回復。

I'm the mother of a fourteen-year-old girl. I have a rule for my daughter: be among the top 5 students or get punished in one way or another. She has been doing very well in school, but some friends of mine keep telling me that I put too much pressure(壓力)on her. Am l wrong?

寫作要點：

1．表明自己的看法；

2．陳述自己的理由（可舉例說明）；

3．提出至少兩條建議

注意：

1．詞數90左右：

2．短文的開頭已為你寫好，不計入總詞數；

3．短文須包括所有內容要點；可適當發揮，使其通順、連貫：

4．短文中不得出現真實的人名、校名等相關信息。

Hi，TigerMom，

What troubles you is actually a trouble for many parents in China. My idea is that

 

 

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

Hi，TigerMom，

    What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China. My idea is that it is not quite right for you to do so.

Although high grades are an important factor in evaluating students and their future university admission, development in wisdom, emotion, health and life attitude at school never be ignored. There are many examples around us. Some all-A student in school have turned out not to be ac successful in society as they were expected. The reason is often that the pressure from their parents allows them almost no time for other activities. Furthermore, punishment is by no means a wise choice to help them grow up mentally and physically.

So I suggest that you take your friends’ advice. More importantly, let her live like a lovely girl; let her have more friends and social activities; and let her make takes of her own as we teenagers often do.

【解析】

試題分析：本文的寫作首先表明自己的看法，可以說明這樣對女孩施以壓力的方法是不對，表明自己并不贊同這樣做；然后說明自己的理由，可以說明孩子在壓力過大中學習生活對自己的學習并不好，只會成為書呆子bookworm,并不能很好的適應這個社會，也不能和同學很好的相處，也許這樣在壓力中學習自己并沒有品味到學習的真正樂趣。最后提出自己的兩條建議，可以建議這位家長多和孩子溝通，帶她去野營，做運動來緩解她的壓力，同時改變自己對成功的看法，并非所有成績好的孩子將來就成功，強調態度看法的改變才是解決問題的根本。

【亮點說明】本文有難度，對字數要求也比較多，對于初中英語的作文，著重考察學生連詞成句的能力，要在“準”字上下功夫。在寫作中作者注意了人稱與謂語動詞的數關系和動詞時態等諸多方面。對于中學作文的寫作，能將所學的知識運用到作文中，寫出富于變化、結構緊湊的文章，不出現中式英文。這能看出該生的寫作功力。

考點：提綱類寫作