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12．有時候，災難或許離我們很近，如2015年6月發生的"東方之星旅游客船傾覆"事件，8月發生的"天津港大爆炸"事件．這些血的事實告訴我們：安全警鐘應時刻鳴響．那么作為中學生，在日常生活中我們應該如何注意安全、保護自己呢？請結合下面的提示內容，以"How to keep safe in our life"為題寫一篇80詞左右的短文．
提示：1．安全意識的重要性；
2．與我們有關的安全；飲食安全，交通安全以及交友安全等等；
3．安全防護的方法（結合2中的某一方面，至少談兩點看法）．
How to keep safe in our daily life
Life safely is important to everyone．There are many kinds of safety，such as food safety，traffic safety，the safety of making friends and so on．But what are we supposed to do to keep ourselves safe？I'll take traffic safety as an example．
Whether we walk or take the bus to school，we must be careful of the traffic．Don't cross the road until there is a green light．When waiting for the bus，don't cut in line．Also，don't play or run on the busy road at any time．This way，we'll keep ourselves safe．．

Answer 1

分析 【高分句型一】
Don't cross the road until there is a green light綠燈才能過馬路．
not…until從句，直到…才．
【高分句型二】
When waiting for the bus，don't cut in line．當在等車的時候，不要插隊．
When waiting for the bus，是when we are waiting for the bus的縮寫形式．

解答 How to keep safe in our daily life
  Life safely is important to everyone．There are many kinds of safety，such as food safety，traffic safety，the safety of making friends and so on．（安全意識的重要性，與我們有關的安全）But what are we supposed to do to keep ourselves safe？I'll take traffic safety as an example．
  Whether we walk or take the bus to school，we must be careful of the traffic．Don't cross the road until there is a green light．【高分句型一】When waiting for the bus，don't cut in line．【高分句型二】Also，don't play or run on the busy road at any time．This way，we'll keep ourselves safe．（安全防護的方法）

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