Question

【題目】（二十四）

假設你是紅星中學高三(1)班的學生李華，請根據以下四幅圖的先后順序，為校刊

“英語園地”寫一篇短文，記述你和同學們今年為老師慶祝教師節的過程。

注意：1．詞數不少于60；

2．短文的開頭已給出，不計入總詞數。

We had a special Teachers' Day this year.

（請務必將作文寫在答題卡指定區域內）

Answer 1

【答案】

One possible version：

We had a special Teachers’ Day this year.

Several days before Teachers' Day, some of my classmates and I had a group meeting in order to decide how we could celebrate it. My classmate came up with the idea of making a short video, so a few hours after the meeting we went outside and filmed it in front of the school entrance. The evening before Teachers' Day, I edited the movie on my computer and added some music. When we eventually showed everybody the video on Teachers' Day, our teacher was very moved and the rest of the class really enjoyed it.

【解析】

試題分析：本文是一篇圖畫作文，要求以李華的名義記敘同學們今年為老師慶祝教師節的過程。根據圖畫式作文的要求，本篇書面表達應該寫成記敘文，可以按照時間順序來進行行文。寫作時要注意記敘文的六要素，包括時間、地點、人物、事件、結果等。因為是記敘過去的事情所以文章要使用一般過去時，第一人稱。而且要注意充分發揮想象來充實文章內容，使用恰當的連接詞以使文章層次分明，條理清晰。此外，還要注意高級詞匯和多種句式的使用，以提高寫作檔次。

【亮點說明】本文范文內容完整，語言準確，條理清楚，時態和人稱使用正確，字數符合要求，是一篇不錯的作文。文章的亮點是高級句式的使用，在文中作者使用了賓語從句 how we could celebrate it.時間狀語從句When we eventually showed everybody the video on Teachers' Day和并列句so a few hours after the meeting we went outside and filmed it in front of the school entrance.等。此外，edit the movie, have a group meeting , come up with , 等短語也增加了文章的亮點。