Question

目前高中學生出國留學(study abroad)是一個普遍的社會現象。假定你是某中學的學生李華，你的美國朋友Jim想要了解人們對此現象的看法。請你根據下面的要點提示，用英語給他寫一封信，告訴他人們的不同看法，并談談你自己的觀點。要點：
1.贊同（學好英語、旅游、獨立……）
2.反對（溝通困難、自理能力差、孤獨……）
3.你的觀點……
注意：1.詞數100左右；
2.可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫；
3.開頭語已為你寫好，不計入總詞數。
Dear Jim,
I am glad that you have an interest in this phenomenon. With more and more high school students choosing
to study abroad, people’s views on the trend are divided.
                                                                              
Best regards,
Li Hua

Answer 1

One possible version:
Dear Jim,
I am glad that you have an interest in this phenomenon. With more and more high school students choosing to study abroad, people’s views on the trend are divided.
Many students and education agencies advocate its advantages. They claim that studying abroad can not only help students learn English well, but also provide them with good opportunities to travel around the English-speaking countries and start to live an independent life.
On the other hand, many others have a negative attitude. They believe that lots of students studying abroad are actually suffering from the difficulties in communication, which in turn makes them lead a lonely life. What’s worse, some students lack the skills in looking after themselves.
Personally, I prefer students to study abroad after receiving their bachelor’s degrees at home, because it is the necessary life skills and higher English level that guarantee a successful study.
Best regards,
Li Hua

試題分析：本文是篇材料作文，材料非常簡單，學生很容易把握寫作要求和寫作目的�？忌�在寫作之前必修認真審題，首先要注意文章的時態，要求是對高中學生出國留學(study abroad)這樣一個普遍的社會現象進行簡單描述和發表看法，所以要用一般現在時。要求讓你給你的美國朋友Jim寫一封信，因此本文必須用第一人稱。再有就是不要根據材料逐字逐句的翻譯，應該注意句子的銜接，以提高作文的檔次。
【亮點說明】范文使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如advocate its advantages，provide them with good opportunities，suffering from the difficulties in communication，in turn等等。還運用了not only…but also并列句型以及which引導的非限制性定語從句等等。并注意了句子的銜接如：On the other hand，Personally等等。