Question

閱讀下面短文，然后按要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。
The officials in the White House and CIA (中央情報局)are rejecting Edward Snowden's beg for mercy. “Mr. Snowden has been against the U.S. law,” White House adviser Dan Pfeiffer said on Sunday about the former systems analyst who has turned fugitive (逃亡者) in Russia. “He should return to the US and face the justice and judgment, and there is no possibility for mercy and forgiveness.”
However, many people support Snowden and a sociology professor Svallfors in Sweden has recommended Snowden for the Nobel Peace Prize for his “heroic effort at great personal cost” disclosing the spying conducted by the National Security Agency of United States. He wrote, “Because of his bravery, Snowden helped to make the world a little bit better and safer”.
It may be too late for Snowden to receive the award this year, but the nomination should be taken seriously by the Nobel Prize committee for next year’s prize. If Snowden is awarded the prize in 2014, he would be the youngest Nobel Peace Winner in the history of the prize.
【寫作內容】
1.以約30詞概括上文的主要內容。
2.以約120詞發表你對“Information Security”的看法，內容包括：
(1)簡述信息安全的重要性；
(2)請舉例說明信息安全事故的危害；
(3)談談如何維護信息安全。
【寫作要求】
1.作文中可以使用親身經歷或虛構的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。
2.作文中不能出現真實姓名和學校名稱。
【評分標準】
概括準確，語言規范，內容合適，語篇連貫。
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Answer 1

American officials refuse to forgive Edward Snowden because he is believed to have done harm to national security, but someone supports and recommends him for the Nobel Peace Prize for his courage.
We are now stepping into the Information Era in which security is becoming vital because it greatly affects many aspects like politics, commerce and our daily life. Thus, much emphasis must be placed on it，or a range of losses will be brought to us.
Take an experience of mine for example. Once my QQ was stolen by a hacker. Not only did he change the password, but also he pretended to be me and told my friends that I had got in trouble and been in urgent need of a large sum of money. My friends were worried and some hurriedly sent money into the hacker’s bank account. As a result, my friends were cheated due to information exposure and I felt rather sorry about that.
Therefore, it is high time that we did something to keep information secure. Personally, laws and regulations must be established. Besides, to improve technology is another solution. Meanwhile, we are supposed to raise the awareness of self-protection. Only in this way can we ensure our rights and interests.

試題分析：本文屬于讀寫任務寫作，動筆前，一定要認真閱讀原文，并理解內容。認真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達給了一段材料：先要求以約30個詞概括上文的主要內容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個詞寫一篇短文，按照要點去表達，不能有遺漏，寫作時注意準確運用時態，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系。寫作時盡量使用自己會的單詞、詞組和句型，同時也要注意使用一些高級語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮點說明】文章簡潔的總結了所給材料，語言規范，內容合適，語篇連貫，使用了詞組：Take sth. for example拿…舉例，in trouble“有困難”， in urgent need of 急切需要，As a result因此,due to由于，和句型： American officials refuse to forgive Edward Snowden because he is believed to have done harm to national security, but someone supports and recommends him for the Nobel Peace Prize for his courage.這句話用了固定句型，    We are now stepping into the Information Era in which security is becoming vital because it greatly affects many aspects like politics, commerce and our daily life. 這句話用了定語從句，Thus, much emphasis must be placed on it，or a range of losses will be brought to us.這句話用了被動語態， Not only did he change the password, but also he pretended to be me and told my friends that I had got in trouble and been in urgent need of a large sum of money. 這句話用了倒裝句， it is high time that we did something to keep information secure.這句話用了虛擬語氣， Only in this way can we ensure our rights and interests.這句話用了倒裝句。還有范文使用了Therefore, Personally,Besides, Meanwhile,這樣的詞使文章更加連貫。