Question

假如你是李華，你打算明年作為交換生到美國Michigan University去學習。你從網上得知一家美國機構提供寄宿家庭的信息。因此你給他們發一封電子郵件，郵件主要內容
包括：
1你對房屋類型及位置的要求；
2，要求免費提供一些生活設施；
3．期望月租；
4期盼盡快回復。
注意.1.詞數l00左右；
2開頭和結尾已寫好，但不計入總詞數；
3可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫。
Dear Sir or Madam.
I'm going to study in Michigan University as an exchange student next year.
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Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Sir or Madam.
I'm going to study in Michigan University as an exchange student next year.
Having learned from your website that you provide accommodation information for overseas students, I’m writing to look for a suitable host family. My requirements are as follows:
First of all ,I’d like to have my own single room, which is comfortable for me to stay in. second，the flat should be in the centre of the city, where the traffic is convenient for me to go around. Third, I’d appreciate it if the host family could provide a washing machine and some essential equipment for free so that I can wash my clothes and cook my meals, Besides, the monthly rent should be no more than $300.
I’m looking forward to hearing from you as soon as possible.
Yours sincerely,
Li Hua

試題分析：本文是書信類作文，你打算明年作為交換生到美國Michigan University去學習。要求給一家提供寄宿家庭信息的美國機構發一封電子郵件，文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，而且很具體，考生要把要點解釋清楚，不能有遺漏。在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。
【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，應用了一些較好的詞組和句子：as follows 如下，look forward to 盼望，no more than不多于， Having learned from your website that you provide accommodation information for overseas students, I’m writing to look for a suitable host family. 這句話用了現在分詞的完成式做狀語， I’d like to have my own single room, which is comfortable for me to stay in. second，the flat should be in the centre of the city, where the traffic is convenient for me to go around. 這里用了兩個定語從句， I’d appreciate it if the host family could provide a washing machine and some essential equipment for free so that I can wash my clothes and cook my meals,這句話用了it做形式賓語和結果狀語從句，還有因為用了First of all ，second， Third, Besides, 這篇文章讀起來很順暢。