Question

當今許多家長不僅要求孩子刻苦學習功課，而且還要求他們學習諸如音樂、舞蹈、書法、美術、棋類等各種特長，希望孩子未來能更成功。對此現象的利弊、得失眾說紛紜。請你根據下面提示要點寫一篇短文并闡述自己的觀點。
益處：發展多種技能,培養多種愛好, 豐富生活；開闊視野，完善自我；增加就業機會
弊端：孩子自我支配時間少； 壓力更大； 加重家庭經濟負擔等
你的觀點： ……
注意：
1.詞數120左右；短文的開頭已經給出，不計入總詞數。
2.參考詞匯： horizon視野
Many parents are trying to find tutors to teach their children special skills such as music, dancing, calligraphy, painting, chess and so on, 
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Answer 1

One possible version
Many parents are trying to find tutors to teach their children special skills such as music, dancing, calligraphy, painting, chess and so on, hoping they’ll become more successful in the future.
Learning special skills can help children develop both different skills and many interests，which can enrich their lives. Meanwhile, they can broaden their horizons and improve themselves. Besides, they will be more likely to get good jobs in the future.
However, life is hard for these children, who have to spend much time practicing the skills. They hardly have their own time to do what they want. Also, they have to suffer more pressure.  What’s worse , their families have to pay more money for their learning.
Different children have different interests and they do need time to relax. So I think parents should let children do what they’re interested in. Only in this way can they enjoy a happy life.

試題分析：本文屬于說明利弊題型，這種題型往往要求先說明一下現狀，再對比事物本身的利弊，有時也會單從一個角度（利或弊）出發，最后往往要求考生表明自己的態度（或對事物前景提出預測）。就本文而言，要求根據提示就家長對孩子從小的過度要求，害怕孩子輸在起跑線上這一現象寫出益處、弊端以及自己的個人觀點，所以在謀篇布局上可以用三個段落來分別講述這三方面內容；此外，作文提示的益處和弊端涉及的內容較多，為了避免內容混亂應當在論述時恰當使用表示順序的詞匯，比如first; second; at last ；one the one hand , one the other hand ; for one thing ; for another thing 等。在時態方面，因為這是一篇論述社會現象的文章，可以使用一般現在時。最后，在語言方面還要注意高級詞匯和句式的多變，以提高文章檔次。
【亮點說明】在范文開頭作者提出家長對孩子們過度要求這一社會現象以及家長們的期望，然后在第二段從三個方面講述了孩子多學習技藝的好處，作者在此段運用了meanwhile 和besides兩個表示層近關系的副詞，使得本段內容層次非常清晰。在第三段段首作者首先使用however一詞引出了這一現象背后存在的弊端，有效地做到了內容上的過渡，而且在表述時也用到了使文章具有層次感的also, What’s worse 等詞匯。最后作者用Different children have different interests and they do need time to relax.作為過渡，提出了自己的觀點。這種段落以及層次的安排，不僅使文章結構緊湊，上下銜接自然，也顯示了作者思路的清晰和對詞匯的準確把握。在句式方面，作者用到了倒裝句Only in this way can they enjoy a happy life.，賓語從句I think parents should let children do what they’re interested in.和定語從句life is hard for these children, who have to spend much time practicing the skills.等豐富了文章的句式，成為了文章的一個個亮點。