Question

假如你是李華。你的好友王楠因不擅長與別人交流，感到非常痛苦。最近，他來信向你求助。請你根據以下提示給他寫一封回信。主要內容應包括：
我們周圍不擅長交流的人挺多的，勸他不必為此事苦惱;
告訴他與別人有效地交流是很重要的。與他人搞好關系，可以有助于我們的學習，還能增加成功的機會；
就如何改變目前的情況給他提出至少兩點建議。
注意：1. 字數：100字左右；   2. 可以適當增加細節，使行文連貫；
3. 信的開頭結尾已給出，不計入總字數。                          
Dear Wang Nan,
I know you are feeling annoyed these days because____________________________
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All the best.   
Yours,
Li Hua

Answer 1

Dear Wang Nan,
I know you are feeling annoyed these days because you are not able to communicate with others effectively. It is my pleasure to offer you some advice on it.
As a saying goes, every man has his faults. I notice some people around us are also not good at communication. So you don’t have to worry too much about it. Of course, good communication is of great importance for us to create a pleasant relationship with others, which can not only be helpful to our study but also increase our chance of success. That is why I would like to make a few suggestions to you.
First of all, be honest and frank to those whom you talk to so as to be understood easily by others. Second, be aware of what you want to say and express yourself clearly. What’s more, you’d better try to understand others when they talk so that you can exchange ideas with them freely.
I hope my advice will be of great help to you.
All the best.
Yours,
Li Hua

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類書面表達，文章的要點也基本上都給出來了，而且很具體，考生要把要點解釋清楚，不能有遺漏。除了表達這些要點以外，還要給出自己的建議，這就要求考生自己拓展發揮，在寫作的過程中，要注意使用高級詞匯和高級句型，如強調句，倒裝句等，讓文章更上檔次。同時在列舉措施的時候要使用合適的連接詞如：First，second， Besides, What’s more等，讓文章看起來很有條理，也很流暢。本篇文章在寫作時不要啰嗦，力求簡潔。
【亮點說明】所給范文語言簡潔，運用了一些詞組和句子：of great help to對…有幫助，not only…but also…，不但…而且…， be aware of 意識到，It is my pleasure to offer you some advice on it.這句話用了it做形式主語， As a saying goes, every man has his faults. 這句話用了非限制性定語從句，Of course, good communication is of great importance for us to create a pleasant relationship with others, which can not only be helpful to our study but also increase our chance of success. 這句話用了定語從句，That is why I would like to make a few suggestions to you.這句話用了表語從句， be honest and frank to those whom you talk to so as to be understood easily by others.這句話用了定語從句， be aware of what you want to say and express yourself clearly. 這句話用了賓語從句， you’d better try to understand others when they talk so that you can exchange ideas with them freely.這句話用了結果狀語從句。還有文章還使用了First of all, Second, What’s more,這樣的關聯詞，使文章更加連貫。