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目前，就業形勢越來越嚴峻。就業壓力不僅是大學生無法回避的現實，也是高中生需要考慮的問題。就此你校編輯部開展了一次題為“就業危機對高中生的啟示”的英語征文活動。請你根據以下提示，寫一篇征文，闡明你的觀點。
1. 努力學習，拓寬知識面； 2. 發展才能，提高個人素質；3. 加強合作精神，培養團隊意識；
4. 了解社會需求，做好人生規劃；  5. 你的觀點……
注意：1. 詞數120左右  2. 可以適當增加細節，以使行文連貫 3. 文章開頭已寫好，不計人總詞數。
What We High School Students Learn from the Job-hunting Crisis
As we all know, the employment situation is getting more and more serious now. Being high school students, what can we learn from it?
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What We High School Students Learn from the Job-hunting Crisis
As we all know, the employment situation is getting more and more serious now. Being high school students, what can we learn from it?
To start with, we should put all our heart into study to broaden our knowledge in various fields. It is required that we should develop our abilities in many aspects and improve our personal qualities to achieve our goals in this highly competitive society. Additionally, learning to cooperate with others is another thing we must do, for the sense of teamwork contributes to success more quickly. Last but not least, as young generation in China, we’d better set our long-term plans to meet what society demands.
At present, I think only by working hard can our ability be fully developed.I’ll spare no effort to study hard to accomplish my goal.

試題分析：本文是一篇提綱作文。寫作時首先要仔細審題，確定人稱，時態，文體。內容要點要全面，上下段要使用連接詞做到連貫。我們在寫作中應當遵循語言表述的經濟原則，即用盡可能少的形式表達盡可能多的語義內容，力求簡潔精練。根據提綱的提示，寫出所列要點，要全面。我們在用詞上應該仔細揣摩，準確清晰地表達我們的思想，剔除冗詞贅語，使文章言簡意賅。
【亮點說明】文中使用了非常好的短語和句子為文章增色不少，比如：As we all know, the employment situation is getting more and more serious now，put all our heart into stuty to broaden our knowledge in various fields. improve our personal qualities，achieve our goals等。還運用了主語從句It is required that we should develop our abilities in many aspects and improve our personal qualities to achieve our goals in this highly competitive society等。并注意了句子的銜接如：To start with, Additionally, Last but not least等。
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