Question

你身邊的不少同學喜歡用手機發短信、聽音樂。有的同學喜歡周末上網玩游戲，影響了正常的學習。針對這個現象，你決定給校廣播站寫一篇稿件，倡議同學們要正確對待現代媒體。內容包括：
1.列舉沉迷于現代媒體的現象；
2.提出合理化的建議。
注意：詞數100字左右。
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That’s all. Thank you!

Answer 1

Dear fellow students,
With the popularity of cell phones and the Internet, some of us students spend too much time playing with cell phones or computer games, which has negative effects on our studies.Worse still, we have little time to communicate with our parents and friends. Nor do we have time for physical exercises.
What shall we do to improve the situation? All of us should be fully aware of the harmful effects of modern media. Let’s limit our time of playing with cell phones or computer games. Instead we should spend more time playing sports or talking with our friends, which helps to relax and communicate with each other.
Let’s stay away from modern media. Let’s take action now!
That’s all. Thank you!

試題分析：這是一篇提綱類書面表達。要求給校廣播站寫一篇稿件，倡議同學們要正確對待現代媒體。內容包括： 1.列舉沉迷于現代媒體的現象；2.提出合理化的建議。這只是一個提綱，沒有具體的內容，難度上增加了，要求在提綱的基礎上進行拓展，豐富文章內容，審題時注意本文使用一般現在時，描述要盡量選擇簡潔的語言，運用合適的語法規則和詞匯把各要點都準確表述出。難點在于選擇詞匯和句型，可以靈活運用高級詞匯和固定短語準確表述。
【亮點說明】范文圍繞兩個要點展開，句式長短句結合，句式多變：With the popularity of cell phones and the Internet, some of us students spend too much time playing with cell phones or computer games, which has negative effects on our studies. 這句話用了非限制性定語從句， Nor do we have time for physical exercises.這句話用了倒裝句， Instead we should spend more time playing sports or talking with our friends, which helps to relax and communicate with each other.這句話也使用了非限制性定語從句。而且使用了一些短語：be fully aware of 充分意識到，stay away from 遠離，take action采取行動，Worse still更糟糕的是。