Question

閱讀下面的短文，然后按照要求寫一篇150詞左右的英語短文。
One day, while she was walking in the woods, a girl found two starving songbirds. She took them home and put them in a small cage. She cared them with love and the birds grew strong. Every morning they greeted her with a wonderful song. The girl felt great love for the birds.
One day the girl left the door to the cage open. The larger and stronger of the two birds flew from the cage. The girl was so frightened that he would fly away. As he flew close, she grasped him wildly. Her heart felt glad at her success in capturing him. Suddenly she felt the bird go limp. She opened her hand and stared in horror at the dead bird. Her desperate love had killed him.
　She noticed the other bird moving back and forth on the edge of the cage. She could feel his great need for freedom. He needed to soar into the clear, blue sky. She lifted him from the cage and tossed him softly into the air. The bird circled once, twice, three times.
　　The girl watched delightedly at the bird's enjoyment. Her heart was no longer concerned with her loss. She wanted the bird to be happy. Suddenly the bird flew closer and landed softly on her shoulder. It sang the sweetest melody that she had ever heard.
　　She finally realized that the fastest way to lose love is to hold on it too tight, the best way to keep love is to give it WINGS!
[寫作內容]
1. 以約30個詞概括短文的要點；
2. 然后以約120個詞就 “愛就要放手” 這一主題發表看法，并包括如下要點：
a) 以自己為例，簡述生活中你父母對你的過度關注；
b) 你父母的做法對你造成了什么不良的影響；
c) 如果有機會，你會就此問題對父母說些什么
[寫作要求]
1.作文中可以使用親身經歷或虛構的故事，也可以參照閱讀材料的內容，但不得直接引用原文中的句子。
2.作文中不能出現真實姓名和學校名稱。
[評分標準]
概括準確，語言規范，內容合適，語篇連貫。

Answer 1

A girl realized the best way to keep love is to let a bird fly when she accidentally killed a bird which tried to escape and freed the other which flew happily.
I must admit that my parents love me very much, but their excessive love sometimes has gone too far. For example, they won’t allow me to chat with my American friend online or allow me to go shopping by myself for fear I might be cheated though I am already 18 years old. What’s worse, they even secretly read my diary.
To be honest, I am now suffering a lot from this. Due to their excessive love, I don’t have many friends. As a girl of 18, I am not able to make my own decisions about many things. Though I can’t tolerate all this, I dare not speak up for I know this is all due to their deep love for me.
If I had the chance to talk with them about this, I would like to tell them that I can manage without their hovering over me! I’d like to say to them, “Please let go of your anxiety. Give me some advice just when necessary, and for most of the time, let me think for myself. Your love should never be a burden on me. Love me, and let me fly with it.”  

試題分析：本文屬于讀寫任務寫作，動筆前，一定要認真閱讀原文，并理解內容。認真看清題目要求，這篇書面表達給了一段材料：先要求以約30個詞概括上文的主要內容，要求有很高的概括提煉的能力，要抓住文章的主題，再以約120個詞寫一篇短文，按照要點去表達，不能有遺漏，寫作時注意準確運用時態，上下文意思連貫，符合邏輯關系。寫作時盡量使用自己會的單詞、詞組和句型，同時也要注意使用一些高級語法和句型，使自己的文章更有文采。
【亮點說明】文章簡潔的總結了所給材料，語言規范，內容合適，語篇連貫，使用了詞組：What’s worse更糟糕的是, Due to 由于，因為，To be honest說實話, let go of 放手，句式上也是富有變化：A girl realized the best way to keep love is to let a bird fly when she accidentally killed a bird which tried to escape and freed the other which flew happily.這句話用了定語從句和不定式做表語， For example, they won’t allow me to chat with my American friend online or allow me to go shopping by myself for fear I might be cheated though I am already 18 years old. 這句話用了目的狀語從句，Give me some advice just when necessary, and for most of the time, let me think for myself. 這句話用了省略句，